Heartbeat

My heart is whole.
My heart does not come in pieces.
You cannot rearrange it,
nor can I fill it with emptiness.
I cannot give it to you
any more than you can break it.
All it does is
beat
beat
beat
against my chest,
as it pumps blood through my impatient veins-
keeping me alive.

My heart is whole,
As are my bones; my mind; my body.
You cannot break me-
not with words. So why can I feel
that my whole heart
is beating so strongly now for you?
All it does is
beat
beat
beat
against my chest.

Author's Note

Originally this ended with the lines..
If love exists the love you hold is smiling-
keeping me alive.
... But I took them out. Just so ya know.

Reviews

[Wildecat]

A fantastic poem, I too like the new ending better, nice write.

[Seracies]

They're both good endings, but I liked the last line you took out, "keeping me alive." I liked the strength of the poem, how you took something as fragile as the human heart and made it unbreakable. The repetition really added to the poem. Nicely done.

i think the new ending is better by the way ^^
i also like the idea of the heart being whole and unbreakable, when often in stories and poetry the heart is broken and empty
this is thought provoking and really very interesting.
nice write
-ST