I can't understand.

Angst at the world for turning
The words forever churning
From the soul within me burning
Yelling, screaming -
                     I am free

However now it seems
I'm living; dying in a dream
From an ancient God's esteem
and they babble conversation -
                     I disagree

But trembling I shall follow
The message I can't swallow
From within me; Dark and hollow
Gently whispering -
                     Can't you see?

Reviews

[Cece]

oh yes rhyme it did
but without rhythm
it dont flow

but flow it did from my mouth
pleasure of rhythm right off
my tongue loudly spoken

its not enough
that you know my pain
but you must feel my pain

not just once
that you know my pain
feel my pain i cannot rhyme

rhythm comes easily
but not rhyme
feel my pain

[Delvin Ashley Draper]

I love the way it rhymes. I think that the poem flowed nicely and enjoyed reading it!

[Rain]

I was drawn in by the ryhme scheme. It definately reflects a talent waiting to explode. Great piece. Rain..

angst is brilliant ^^