All In Vain

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Come and take away

The madness

Invading my head 

Find a hiding place

In the shadows 

Where I can escape 

I can no longer stay here 

And remain as I am

The reality is killing me 

My lips are quivering 

As I cry in agony 

The bitterness and hate 

Take my oxygen away 

Til my lungs are empty

And I lay unconscious 

This I'd rather bear 

Than live in shame 

Of the empty life I've lived

Author's Note

The original:
Can't you take away
This hurt
Pestering inside my head

Won't you hide me
In a corner
Where I won't be seen

Extract my oxygen
Completely empty
So I lay unconscious

This would be easier
For me to bear
Than the shame of life

I can no longer be here
And remain as I am
The reality kills me

My lips are quivering
I cry
As I die with hate

Reviews

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I can relate

[Chaos]

This is a very sad and lonely character you created. Time to die with the knowledge (percieved) that they were a victim of their own pain. How sad. The flow was great in some places and lagged in others, but over all it was a sad, but a nice read.