Bliss.

blahhhh. :P

How did I end up here again?
I can’t bare these chains.
The weight of this “sin”?

 

How could you get so far away?
But stay so long.
How could you not come back?

I can feel your breath in the fire.

Just letting these scars bleed,
Isn’t enough.

I need something more,
Something that’s even more afflicting.
Something that’s so much more addicting,
Than this obscene gesture of Love.

 How can you speak these words?
The pain in your heart,
Has traveled to this pen.
Fingers designed for tragedies touch.

Author's Note

allll reviews are welcome!

Reviews

[Aradie Rain]

You speak of this person as sort of an addiction. Your addicted to them and when you leave it's like withdrawals. I loved the line "Fingers designed for tragedie touch" I think it fits perfectly in wth what you are talking about. Great Job, I would however try not to make the reading so cluttered, It was a bit hard to read. Although I think the style is perfect, like your suffocating without them, and it is shown through your writting.
~Aradie

[Sally]

This is great. When I read it the first thing I thought was the loss of love so if that was the point then you got it! It kind of seems like the speaker was betrayed and expressing their feelings.
But all in all, I liked it. :)

[Comatose]

Wow, this is absolutely amazing- one of the best pieces I've read so far. Well done. ^^

[Jacqueline Lopez]

I loved some of the words and rhymes you used in this poem.

[Demetria.Ro$e.Hathaway]

Grate Poem :-)

[Taylor H.]

loved it!

[snapstache]

I love it!
One thing I don't get is the part where you say 'The pain in your heart, Has traveled to this pen, Fingers designed for tragedies to touch.'
I don't really see how that fits, but it's pretty early so maybe that's why.
Other than all of that, I loved it.
One of the best I've read from you. (so far)
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