Failing in lust.

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Girl you know I've become immortal.
Cause No where ever feels like home.
I breathe but I'm not alive.
One more drink will get me by.

Girl stop this, cause I know you really do try.

And i know. you've always known.
Life never used be this hard.
Your memory has made me immortal.

My lips keep dripping lies.

Everything should be invisible.
So i could blend right in.
Important words becomes nothing,
in the site of what makes us bleed.

One more drink will get me by.
I breathe but I'm not alive.
Cause No where ever feels like home.
Girl you know I've become immortal.

You were just another lie.

Author's Note

reviews go for it.

Reviews

[OkieWonKenokie]

Love this. I like the first and last stanza how you moved the lines around. Beautiful concept like CandyLove said. Spectacular write.

[Candylove.]

i looove this, the concept is just beautiful to me; being "immortal". The word choice and phrasing is really nice also. The repetition is what makes this powerful. Well done. :)

[indieRokker]

"My lips keep dripping lies."
^^meeeeeaaan line :] *btw mean mean's Great ;)
Nicely thought out, I loved this piece and I liked how you switched the last stanza back to front from the first. Deep :]

indie♥♥