Heaven Denied

We all have to face the consequences of our actions

               HEAVEN DENIED
Lilting music cascades its chords,
Over my ever eager soul,
Gossamer silk like  a lover's caress,
Teasing my skin to exquisite pleasure,
Reality straddled  and brought to heel,
Awake,asleep,both or neither ?

 

Heaven opened and I dared a glance,
Like a voyeur in the dark,
Awed to see life's reward,
Splayed before me,
Her treasures my every desire,
As if plucked like a rose from the very depth of my mind,

 

My heart pounds in my chest,
Lest I am found and made to leave,
Musical laughter from cherubic lips,
Tempt me to boldness,
Surely I would be welcome,
If not ,why was I here?

 

"You are here"said a voice laced with knowledge,
Dripping with age"to see what your choices have denied you"
"Your penance ,for decisions you have made,
For people you have hurt,for tears you have wreaked,"
Each softly spoken word,
Like a stake piercing my chest.

 

Her words barely whispered,
Chilling in their finality rendered me mute,
Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,
My actions in life their impact ricocheting into death,
As the gates closed and penance was wrought.

 

 

Author's Note

We must all think about our actions because there are always repercussions

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,"
I do believe in Karma. I have paid for every bad deed I have done in two-fold. The poem is amazing. Should be read by many. Every action good and bad had consequences. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much your words are very appreciated :)

[Rasi Rana]

The way you presented this simple message is amazing)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much I am glad you liked it:)

[Lyn Anderson]

You have an ability to make poetry very relateable through effective personification. Very clever indeed.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

[genocide]

i like this poem it's good hon

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much my friend.I realized you liked it when you requested me to red it haha:)

[BubblingMe]

Beautiful! You are a great Poet!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you .You are also a great poet so your words mean a lot:)

[BubblingMe]

woow thanks for this compliment ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[BubblingMe]

haha okay :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what we give up in the next life sometimes in order to satisfy desires in this one---

there is always payment...nothing is free, and there is no definite pass to any wonderous garden in a future life.

this afterlife poem reminds me somewhat of dickinson and how she liked to use apostrophe...writing from the perspective of the dead....she spoke often of immortality although claiming not to believe in a God of any kind.

really good poem..

jacob

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you jacob for your lovely review:)

[wordman]

you painted a beautiful picture of heavens landscape
treasures in heaven,what can I find I really enjoyed this read
ron

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Very beautiful and what a divine way to warn us all about karma! Amazing!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much .This is exactly so:)

[Matt DeFranco]

Accountability extends pass into and past this life. Truly an eternal principle. So I believe. Great piece.

[Vidya Bacchus]

We all have to deal with our choices.Thank you for your kind words:)

[Riddhiman Basu]

Brilliant way to represent the Karmic philosophy. Your poetry is exquisite

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you, karma is right what goes around comes around.:)

[Michelle N. H.]

I am in love with that first stanza. When read aloud the words fitted so well in the mouth, they were a pleasure to pronounce. Beautiful, Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you michelle .I am awed by your lovely comment!