My everything

My most recent writing (June 13). Just about simple love I guess.

Your face is so warm against my neck, your body lounges on top of me, carelessly. Reminds me of warm milk and honey. I run my hand through your hair, my fingers digging slightly, you sigh in pleasure. “Mmm” I smile. I can’t do anything but smile. The tender sunlight moves slowly across our bare bodies. I pull the blankets around us. They’re cool, thick and soft. I throw my head back, turning to the side, wiggling out from beneath you. You fall over as though you’re sleeping, and I slip a leg over you… You smile with your eyes closed, you breathe in deeply.

 

The room smells of musk, and apples. Moist red apples, fresh. I kiss your shoulder, your neck, my teeth tug on your ear. You laugh, I laugh. “Morning” you whisper, hoarse against my cheek. You offer to make me breakfast. And oh, I’d love some eggs, some orange juice. A nice cold cup, as I reach for it, cooling my hand and dampening it. To fiddle around with the silver fork on the glass plate. I love the way it feels to eat food with a fork. A long thin fork, poking slightly at the food, nibbles. But I crawl on top of you and tell you not to leave. And you won’t. You will not move from this bed till the morning of tomorrow, because I said so. And I tell you this. And you laugh, holding me. “Okay”. And I kiss you. This is perfect. This is what perfect is. If there is god, God is in this kiss. God is this kiss. Your lips, they speak with mine so harmoniously. Your tongue dances along with mine. Making love, oh your kiss is heavenly. Your hand buries into my hair. My legs tangle with yours. And we’re one. We’re ever definition of what perfection can only hope to be. Your smooth chest against my large breasts. You pull me up slightly and turn me on my back. Your hands caress my body. I laugh, you laugh. And you kiss me harder, deeper. You straddle me and you kiss my neck. You grab me by the chin, pulling away, and you tell me you love me, and I giggle. My hands find your face, pulling back your seemingly long hair. I whisper on your nose, I love you too, and then we play like children. I bite you, and you bite me. Laughter and sheets, the smell of apples everywhere. Musk and morning light. Your naked body against mine. Your dark brown hair falling in my face. And forever today we’ll make love, and we’re just fine. With our troubles at the door, we’re just fine today. Basking in sunlight, in this… silly romance. You make my heart pound so bravely. You kiss my legs… And you’re my everything today.

Author's Note

So, how is it?

Reviews

[Kaitlyn M.]

Your description is done rather well here, but my only issue with it would be to add some paragraph breaks to make it MUCH easier on your readers. We tend to shy away from massive blocks of text, so adding some white space could really improve upon the overall effect. However, the writing itself is rather well done.

[Jordan]

The description within this piece of Literature is very well portrayed, and it paints quite the image within this. The only really problem I have with this is just for you to space things out. It can be somewhat confusing to just read a massive block of text, and people may get lost. This shouldn't be taken into the offensive by anyone, I'm just stating out some facts. Although, The writing itself is very well done, and I really would like to read some more of your writing. This one was very beautiful, you know, and it had great description! Thank you for the write!