(54) Girl

Hey girl I wonder why you do
Things that just seem absurd
Things that you do to you
To make yourself hurt

You take a knife and twist
And you make a deep cut
Why do you cut your wrist
Pain in the eyes you shut

I know you are feeling down
People knock you about everything
And then the sorrows you drown
Please do not let them win

I see you swallow another pill
Wanting to kill your fear
Just throw them out the window sill
Please remember I am here

   copyright Chris smith 2004

Author's Note

This poem was written for my friend back in 2004, she was going through some bad times.
I know it's not the best of poems, but it helped her knowing she had friends that cared.

Reviews

[Ashley]

i have to say that maggielou reviewed this piece wonderfully. it is a lesson that everyone has to learn on his/her own. and it's a difficult and painful one. often while desperately seeking the approval of others all we really want is our own...and that's a very hard thing to give to oneself. it is something that i am glad is being addressed and that there are people out there wanting to help...or at least show they care.

[SpokenWord]

Sometimes the best poems are the one that hold truth and a deeper meaning to them even if it is only to one person who needed it at that moment. Great write.

[Hello, Goodbye]

no writing is better than candid feeling from the heart.. when can readily grasp your intent and feelings..

[A.Noel]

it is a great encouragement poem, and I can very much relate to your friend and how she must've been feeling. She was lucky to have you there for.

[C. Rose]

Such sorrow...sitting in the tragedy of a friends torment. This was such a statement of love, thank you for sharing. ~ Rose

[typingaway]

Wow, simple yet so realistic! Amazing write!! Well done!

[Hayley]

Sometimes the most simplest of poems with the most simplest of rhymes can mean more than any other well-structured piece of writing. It is the subject that matters, which makes it seem deeper into emotion, and that you really care.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we need friends to give us hope. I like the emotion and the desire of this poem. Easy to take the simple way out. Hard to stand strong. That is why we need friends and family to pick us up. I like the positive ending to this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Althelia Marie Caine]

I wonder that same thing myself, my friend. Very nice

[Tommy]

Speaking from the depth of despair, it is always good to hear from the ones that love you when you are down and feeling lonely amongst the crowd.

Heartfelt Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Rachel]

Sad to say I have said things like this to my friends... Well, mainly one, but my words don't reach her... Pain, suffering, depression, it all sucks, and some of us go through it, sadly. Hell, I went through it.. But this poem reaches your heart letting you know you're not on your own.

Touching poem, Chris. You've once again created something amazing.