The Positive Suicide

Put him in his room,
a patent of

his own accord.
Pulling strands of

linoleum light
through the trap door.
Underneath the sinister pulse
a zig-zag of thought,
livid and fucked,
a Constitution of his own accord.
Trapped animal.
Re-born and a need to be freed.
Breed your ideas and

annunciate

your lies.

Reviews

[Seshat Nidaba]

You conjure up a psychiatric patient at his last ends to my mind. Very edgy, depressive people see things in nihlistic tones, sometimes I guess the world seems worth escaping.

I find it very contemporary and I like the desperate tinge.

[Kiri Nells]

It's good. It may just be my misunderstanding of the poem, but it seems all over the place. I feel like there's too many ideas you're trying to fit into the same poem. Like I said, I might just be misunderstanding it. I am quite a bit tired, so I'm not thinking properly. :)

[Liz]

"The Positive Suicide"... This title is such a paradox. After all, how can suicide be positive? It's one taking one's own life.. which could quite possibly be the most negative thing existing. I really like "Pulling strands of linoleum light through the trap door." That is such a great metaphor and when I read those two lines I thought of someone sitting in a dark room, trapped to a chair, but then they see beams of light through a crack in a trap door which gives them hope to being freed.
Love it(: