pure

when poems are mere words,
tumbling down the stairs of thought
with heads full of flowers, hearts full of sand,
i tiptoe out of the back-door, midnight-blue weather,
wearing nothing but my last pair of sanity,
to keep warm; i lock the door behind me,
take a breath, as i brave the cold,
away from the drabness, i throw the key
to the door of alone with barely a word,
not making any sound, writing the hours
in a sun-room of the mind, almost spotless

Reviews

[1]

Searching for clarity and expressing what is in our head can become complex at times because we have so much we want/need to say. Great imagery and clarity expressing when thoughts are unclear...........

[highonwords]

thank you so much for the wonderful comment and lovely visit :) - much appreciated - glad you like the poem :)

steph

[1]

You are welcome!

[SmittyJas]

I like what is written down here for all to read its a great play on words if you only can see.

[highonwords]

thank you, thank you so much for dropping by and for the wonderful comment - much appreciated :)
read morethank you, thank you so much for dropping by and for the wonderful comment - much appreciated :)

regards,s
steph

[Lydia Shutter]

Tobias Smollett used that line, "door of alone" and I always liked it. Then I read it on a site called "Deviant Art" by someone named "High on Words" and actually the entire poem you posted here is there. I am hoping you posted this in both places under two different pennames. It's a good poem, but now I have some questions about it.

[highonwords]

hi lydia - i am on DeviantArt, too - highonwords (stephanie) is my name over there - but real name is stephanie - i will look up Tobias Smollett - it is the first time i have heard of him - thank you, lydia, for the wonderful visit and comment :)

steph

[Lydia Shutter]

Now I understand why the same poem was on that site. You certainly have changed your writing style in the few weeks since you began posting here.

[highonwords]

i joined DA, October, last year - but i started here on WC, June 2013 - i wrote and wrote and read and read, some lines and style i realized didn't work - i sorted the whole bunch out - try to sort out what would work and what wouldn't - i remember the first poem i wrote - i was 16 years old, it had a religious theme - the style and lines were very rudimentary - but practice, practice a lot and i somehow get in the clear of things :)

regards,
steph

[highonwords]

are you also on DA? if you are, then i could send you a note over there and add you to my list of 'watched' writers :)

my best,
steph

[Lydia Shutter]

No I just sometimes read poetry there.

[highonwords]

oh, DA and WC both have helped me become a better writer - 'though i cringe over my earlier poems, i let them be, since i gotta start with something, right? if you ever join DA, please feel free to look me up there and drop me a note :) thank you, lydia :)

my best to you,
steph

[Lyn Anderson]

this is one of my favourites of your recent writes. Such honesty comes through the images. "Pair of sanity" such an intriguing line.

[highonwords]

thank you, kl, for the wonderful visit and comment - glad you like the poem :)

steph

[V]

I like your choice of words, they create wonderful and somewhat pieceful images. "Wearing nothing but my last pair of sanity" - great line. Also "almost spotless" reads really well to my mind. Your writings are enchanting pieces.

[highonwords]

thank you so much, vanessa, for the lovely visit and comment :) glad you like the poem

read morethank you so much, vanessa, for the lovely visit and comment :) glad you like the poem

regards,
steph

[V]

You're welcome. Your poems contain beautiful words.

[highonwords]

vanessa, if i may ask - do you think they speak some truth about the world?

steph

[V]

They do but in your case (your poems) maybe a version of the truth which is too nice. I don't know how to express this...

[highonwords]

thank you, vanessa, for telling me :)

steph

[V]

You're welcome. Sorry, sometimes I just fail to express in words what goes through my mind.

[gabrielle]

I am not sure of your intent in here but may be this may pertain to talks/writings without substance.

[highonwords]

it's when i want to write, but my thoughts are garbled - this is in search of clarity. of level precision on perspectives on poetic subject - thank you so much for the lovely visit and comment :)

steph