Manipulation?<3

Written about the same girl in Cause For Concern; and again, I like some of my lines, but my rhythm is whack.

It’s Miss Manipulation’s
Heart-throb operation
That brings me to my knees.
I pray she’ll hear my plea’s.
Give careful consideration-
I risked her condemnation
When I said I’d like to tease
A smile from her. Please
Don’t look down on my distress,
Her smile makes me digress
To simple moons of starlit wonder
Eyes of lightning, rolling thunder
It’s a female I must undress-
I wish to bed a lioness-
In bed, again, but the sheets I’m under
Sing of lust, my heart-throb’s hunger.
Those starlit eyes of the lioness
Drag me, trap me, in her chest.

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

Great poem!
Loved the wording and rhyming.
Excellent job. I really enjoyed this.
I loved it all but one line that was really catchy was
"To simple moons of starlit wonder
Eyes of lightning, rolling thunder"
I'm going to add this to my favorites :D