Cold Coffee

My One Year anniversary poem

Slow disco

Sweet music

Quicker tempo

Faster beat

The sound of slow music as I hug your back

The smell of coffee as I take a whiff off a pack

I finally said, “I love you” through smitten writing

My calloused and nervous heart kept beating

My emotions are still true

My emotions still did go through

It's been a year since my tongue got burnt

I’m very thankful for the things I’ve learned

Slow disco

Sweet music

I’m living in limbo

Not amusing

As I listen to the music and hum softly

I’ll make me another cup of coffee

Author's Note

This poem commemorates my anniversary here in Writer's Cafe! I wrote my first poem draft on Dec. 12, 2016 and published it on a later date. I love this place. Thanks senpai for bringing me here. <3 much love.

Reviews

[Rosie Brooklin]

This is wonderful and relatable! I enjoy the casual yet artistic tone of this poem. My only critique would be that I think writing "myself" instead of "me" might make it flow better. However! I do think that it adds character, if that's what you intended. Enough of my nitpicking; I truly did enjoy this piece. I can't wait to see what else you'll write!

[Hurry]

Thanks a loot! I’m sure your writings are much better tho. I can’t wait to check on them! Thanks again

[Rosie Brooklin]

I hope you do! You're very welcome.

[lessa (kenzie)]

My emotions are still true
My emotions still did go through
It's been a year since my tongue got burnt
I’m very thankful for the things I’ve learned

I really loved these lines, This is relatable and wonderful

[Unspoken poet]

Love this, I adored the last two lines the most, great for a summary.

[lostnstars]

I love how you always incorporate coffee in your writings and the way you put the two stanzas with
"slow disco
sweet music..."
When I read this poem, I noticed just the right balance of you expressing the ambiance of the story, how you are feeling, and what you are doing. This poem takes the readers into your world and in your perspective in some type of way and that means it's a very well written poem. Another perfect writing in my opinion :)
Please keep on writing, you're amazing x
-blue jay

[Hurry]

Naaaweee :3 i can take all kinds of complements except yours; its too much for me to handle