Madness

Leave me not, a song, a word a sigh, but a sweet memory-a summation-of dreams past.

I like to watch the girl
pouring herself, ever so quietly
over the edge...

Below, pale feet,
lie nothing but black and liquid

And still she yearns for the chasm's embrace

Leave me not, a song, a word a sigh,
but at least one soft lock of gold,
before the night ceases.

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

My third reading of your work and I sense the murderous nature of your beauty. I wish you could come upon me and kill me sweetly.

Regards,
Al

[songstress]

wow, Thank you for the reviews. I really do not know what to say other than thank you, and that you're an interesting character. I don't really get the chance to meet to many people who find madness "amusing". Thank you.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I worked in a mental institution for a few years as a nurse with upbringing and PTSD I found insanity interesting.

[songstress]

That would explain things...sometimes the illusion itself can be more uplifting than reality. Thank you so much for sharing.

[William Liston]

Very intriguing and unique. I like how the title contrasts with the poem in that it's not typically what one would describe as madness. The descriptions and imagery did a great job of creating an eerie feel. This poem speaks volumes for its brevity. Well done.

- William Liston

(P.S. I think "chasm's" in the sixth line needs an apostrophe).

[songstress]

Nice to hear from you again, Liston. I hope that your year's been going well. And thank you for the kind words and the corrections. I'll be sure to give the piece a once over.

[Lydia Shutter]

A powerful psychological write. Bittersweet. Lydi**

[songstress]

thank you lydia, I appreciate your words.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You gave a haunting portrayal to the madness...and a beautiful poignancy in a brevity of words.

Stunning read!

[songstress]

Thank you so much. Scheppers. Honestly, I don't do short poems-and I was on the fence, but you and Ryens reassured me. thank you so much.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are most welcomed!

[Tai Ryens]

Madness for sure and you portray it poignantly, wanting to dive deeper into that chasm's embrace despite how low she already is. Self-loathing can do that to a person.

But yet you stand by her, searching for virtue among mess that madness leaves as the night goes on.

Well done.

[songstress]

Thank you Ryens, I truly appreciate the review.