puzzle piece

an old poem, i updated.

Empty house along the way,
          stop for awhile,
             a feeling of loneliness,
                    a Missing piece in a puzzle

Alone in this dusty old place.

I adore its beauty

       it scratch a hole in my heart

          Until it wounded me wide open,

                                 leaving me totally blind and clueless

                                      of everything around me.

I tried to stay away,

  But I keep coming back

                              For -

                     just one more glance,
                                   just one more moment,
                                                                     and one last touch.

Everything comes is just an illusion I stumble upon.
This was never mine in the first place.
Hoping against time
                          that someday,

      somewhere,

and sometime in the past

                    I'll be able to find
                                     All together your missing pieces
                                    In this messy and crazy puzzle piece.

I wish you were mine,
                             just be mine….

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

For some reason as soon as I read the first line I put a tune to the entire poem and sang it in my head (better that than out loud) It gave the piece a lyrical quality, literally. I love the world this poem created for me, one of longing, of being close yet faraway. Thank you.
-x-

[Shep]

Again very romantic. Which was awesome.

[Renée]

Wishing, wanting , ever to be.. heartbreaking...

[Barbara Walker]

I like the format you used! Very nice!

[RachelReaper]

I think its beautiful

[Maya Storm]

Pain can come from pining over something that was not to be. Even more than being alone, wanting/craving may be of greater sting.

[Junert]

Woah. Love it.

[Brandon Mathis]

once again another great poem from you keep em coming

[That_Girl]

Very emotional... I really like this!

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

A nice write. All I can say is that the emotions are apparent and very nice and organized. The speaker's desires are clear and very interesting.

Keep writing :D