outburst of the tempest

~ atlast a poem!

 

I am not in pain

But I’m standing in the hard rain

The wetness makes my feet numb

I succumb to be dumb

A foolish playfulness

Hiding the crudeness

-          I roam around in happy commotion

A complete illusion

                

The eye of the storm will come my way, someday

I hope not too soon, but in the distant future

For I am not prepared on the messiness it harbors in its back

The harsh judgments that will pour heavily on my shoulders

Then flowing water will flood my sane world

I need my time to organize

My mental, emotional and physical stability

To stand the outburst of the tempest

Author's Note

credits for pic, found in DA:
Embrace the storm
Eye of the storm

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we have to embrace the storm of emotions in our lives...it will help keep us sane if we don't fight it...

and a hard rain is refreshing once in awhile...and i like the first line...almost a disclaimer...don't believe what you read after this line...

i am not in pain, really.

i felt this poem so much i had to change out of my wet clothes.

[Pax]

~ smiling ~ can't help but smile at your cleverness my friend... I am happy with this ~ thank you very much...

[The dark story]

A complete illusion"....i liked these a lot as they have just hit me at my heart...feels like the world has now become a mere illusion and every "real" thing is so pretentious!!...i think we all are not ready to embrace the upcoming ups and downs in our life as we just can't predict them and the only thing we need is time to organize ourselves and that's what exactly you have said there!!
This is BRILLIANT...you're truly an inpiration for me...thanks a lot!!

[Pax]

wow ~ thank you very much my friend ~ yes, we can never predict what will happen in our lives but the only thing i can do is to always prepare, even though i know i am not completely ready yet ~ like always expect the unexpected ~

to be honest my real world becomes pretentious as of late, wc helps me alot in expressing it here and my friends like you who listen is already enough for me to strive for the better me in the future, hope you too... I am grateful you come by and read my verses!

[The dark story]

A complete illusion"....i liked these a lot as they have just hit me at my heart...feels like the world has now become a mere illusion and every "real" thing is so pretentious!!...i think we all are not ready to embrace the upcoming ups and downs in our life as we just can't predict them and the only thing we need is time to organize ourselves and that's what exactly you have said there!!
This is BRILLIANT...you're truly an inpiration for me...thanks a lot!!

[The dark story]

A complete illusion"....i liked these a lot as they have just hit me at my heart...feels like the world has now become a mere illusion and every "real" thing is so pretentious!!...i think we all are not ready to embrace the upcoming ups and downs in our life as we just can't predict them and the only thing we need is time to organize ourselves and that's what exactly you have said there!!
This is BRILLIANT...you're truly an inpiration for me...thanks a lot!!

[Peter H]

embracing yourself for the full impact . knowing that some kinda pain is coming whilst hiding it under the guise of happiness . good piece i like it

[Pax]

thank you much pete ~ I am grateful with this review ~

[FJ Davis]

Life is just one big pop quiz!
Specific preparation is almost impossible; general principles, however, are constantly given.
Thought-provoking piece, Pax!

[Pax]

thank you as always mr. Frank ~

[Shep]

In some ways we are the same. I no longer see or hear the music nor the colors as the world to me is silient and the colors dull and faded.

[Pax]

for you my friend ~ your a survivor ~ you've survive the raging tampest in your life... and that's admirable :)

[captain]

"I am not in pain But I’m standing in the hard rain", a powerful opening words that reflects your stronger side. I think your much stronger than me Pax, great work!

[Pax]

thank you Captain. I am not yet, but I am hoping :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Strong use of metaphor and lucidly written, really I could visualise every expression, really this is excellent

[Pax]

thank you Sheema, my friend... it's always a pleasure when you visit...

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You are very welcome dear Pax

[RachelReaper]

"I roam around in happy commotion, a complete illusion." I think those are my favorite lines, because they show that this person, in some small part of their mind, knows the lie their living, that they can fake a smile for everyone, but not themeselves.

[Pax]

it's amazing on how you see it so much my friend, indeed its easy to fake a smile to everyone but deep inside we cannot fake it ourselve. I am grateful for this review my friend :)

[RachelReaper]

anytime Pax