dull shades

in through the water
something murky, creeping up
upon me, swaddling me like
little monsters robbing
comfort blind from me.

i take the dull shades
through the glass and
the car rolls on while
i suck the color back
through the cracks
just enough to have 
a breath of something
fresh and dancing,
but little young me can't
take a bug in my brain
to press fear like rivers
in my tears,
they just make pools in my ears
till i never can hear again.

oh just wanna being lying
to you, with you
oh just wanna sip a little
of what i swam through.

maiden, me
i was in a burning life
too fast and passing to
feel it scorch,
just me holding that
blue, red, yellow,
torch. 

i shrunk when they sucked you from me

Reviews

[Nisreen]

This feels like passing through this experience of being with someone so fast
That one cant recognize that all the good has passed
I feel your attempt to cleanse your soul
As shades of you wear off

I could be so wrong
but this is what i see ....

On any account its quite stunning

[d]

i find your writing style quite capturing

[Woody]

gosh this is deep stuff wolfshrew! nothing like the silly little things I write which pass for poems.
I had to read this several times. great imagery and great last line.

[. serah .]

-- i love the way this piece unravels and takes the reader to the last line... to experience the writer's loss... -- the image of not being able to hear reveals a very intense silence which accompanies this loss... -- the attachment with this person who leaves... rather is taken away... is very profound and feels like an attachment which is so immensely emotional that it feels physical... -- pain usually doesn't manifest in physical ways but only a skilled and sensitive poet like you can give it a physical form... -- i really like the way you describe otherwise indescribable experiences... thank you for that...

[alexlessah]

wow im speechless! i love the emotion you can feel!

[celyn]

i'm glad that you've been posting more writing lately...
i have missed reading your poetry.
sometimes you describe me better than i could myself.