the flight

yeah, The Great Gatsby is boring. But I wrote poems during that unit, so here ya go...

to take a city and pull it out

     like a canvas

through your mouth

     and haply give up some soul

 

or take paint-dabbled wings

     and fashion them with a toothy-edged knife

using them not to fly, but to glide

     head in heaven, toes in the ocean

 

atlast cast off tye dye sails

     and rip them into a sunrise

letting go, dropping down

     and find, at the beginning, the love that called you to drown in beauty.

Reviews

[Mark-Anthony]

I love the touch of nature you have used to create such lovely images, a beautiful write. The last verse is wonderful and love this line:
"and rip them into a sunrise"
Such a great image and a pleasure to read

Mark-Anthony

[SweetPersephone]

This one has a cool-easy vibe to it. Very good. *two thumbs up*

[Andromeda]

my favorite youve done so far! incredible w/ a spanish accent.

[Sara]

I love the similes and metaphors here, and lovely picture I get of a sunset over the ocean. I'm not sure if that was the picture you were trying to convey, but that's what I saw. I understand what it feels like to drown in beauty, and that is a beautiful way to write it.