Got To Be Free

I have searched for god,

and he has searched for me.

I`ve been searching,

searching to be free.

Like a bird, on a wire,

like a log, on a fire.

smoke rising like me,

just trying to be free.

And satan,

riding my back.

tossing me to and fro,

looking for a place  

my soul can go .

But can`t you see,

I`m like the smoke

rising from the fire,

I just got to be free...

Author's Note

Reviews

[PANDORA]

This, for some reason, reminds me of a marionette wanting to cut the strings and be in control of its own movements, and life decisions.

I like this as a song. I do, however, have one suggestion.

Like a bird, on a wire,---while the rest of the piece seems freeing this line did not seem to fit. Maybe rewording it?

Hope this helps

[wordman]

that was the challenge,bird on a wire,thanks

[PANDORA]

what do I know...:-) :-)

[E G TEN]

Hey WM, Strong Statement you have here, indeed we all
got to be free, no matter what" cool poem thanks!

[wordman]

cool coment my friend,been very busy ,will get back to the group soon

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Smokey words drifting through the heart....loved the reference to smoke which created great imagery.

[wordman]

this write came from a challenge,thanks for the review

[sunprincess]

.........incredible write....and love the rhyming :) ★

[wordman]

thank you sun princess and welcome to writers cafe

[sunprincess]

.........most welcome and thank you :) ★

[Indra Neil]

deep and inspiring imagery in this wonderful rhyming brevity! the metaphors / similes are superb and the last stanza is a highlight!!

[wordman]

thank you very much for the visit

[Indra Neil]

u r most welcome!

[Jimmy Yetts]

True freedom is certainly one of our God-intended blessings.
Satan will always endeavor to deprive Mankind of its legacy.
Jesus Christ stands as our more than able advocate.
A lovely bit of pure poetry, W!

[wordman]

thank you for your review

[Weeping willow]

Lovely emotions,very good write;]

[wordman]

thank you ww for the review

[Sami Khalil]

You are excelling and moving upwards. An excellent one...:)..................

[wordman]

i am flatteredn my friend,thank you

[Sami Khalil]

You deserve it...You are welcome...:)..................

[Kenneth The Poet]

Damn good stuff! That is all.

[wordman]

thank you kenneth