Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[David Scott]

The music and the poetry pair well.
It feels like thick, humid misery.
A work of art.

[wordman]

thank you david,i try to pair them together so they compliment each other

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I love "color me sad" that was a great line, Ron. Great poem about a sad heart missing a sweet heart, my friend :)

[wordman]

thank you lynn !

[wordman]

you be careful out there in the rain tonight!

[McBear]

Very beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it. I loved how you said "Color me sad" as if "sad" has a color. Interesting.

[wordman]

oh yeah! it has a color,thank you !

[micky]

Wow this is an amazing piece wordman...the flow of ur words and the emotion moves me...well done!!!

[wordman]

thank you micky,good to see you

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Lovely song from lovely poet.

[wordman]

you are to kind,thank`s

[AaronFreitas]

This would go beautifully on acoustic guitar... pouring those feelings out my friend. You penned these words perfectly :)

[wordman]

just think what i could do if i had a bottle of bourbon,thank you

[AaronFreitas]

haha... that would only release the filter my friend :)

[JayceeC]

You always have the perfect piece of music. On this one I have to wonder if the song didn't spark the poem. It can be pouring when there's not a cloud in the sky.

[wordman]

no i added the music after,i wrote the poem playing color my world,thank you

[JayceeC]

Oh wow, that's a gave too and I can see how it would have sparked this.

[wordman]

half way through the write i played this one