Thanks for sharing your spiritual side. I think many people can identify wih this piece. We all have those times when we feel disconnected and it is a lonely, barren place to be. Your words describe it very well. Nice work! I did want to mention in the second stanza, correction in the last line-should be "call upon", not "call up on."
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,and i thought i fixed that type o,guess i didn`t,lol
Everyone has down and blue moments, when life is not as we wish it to be ... It is simply that most men will never reveal that innermost side of themselves for fear of being judged as weak ... It takes a real man to embrace all that he is in times of strength, as well as those times of doubts and fears called weakness ... Well done ...
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you for the visit marvin,appreciate the review
It is very very touching and smooth to the heart. I loved this line. Enjoyed a lot.
"A deaf ear has now taken the place
of my god and his grace
though i walk through the valley of death
i do fear evil i feel alone my heart cold
and out of place"
This piece conjured thoughts of sadness and gentleness yet forgiveness knowing that your god will again be there for you with outstretched arms no matter how far we stray
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
these are feelings that millions of people feel in life's journey,like the photo of jesus carrying t.. read morethese are feelings that millions of people feel in life's journey,like the photo of jesus carrying the man through the sand,one set of foot prints..where was you God..thank you again
A deaf ear has now taken the place
of my god and his grace
though i walk through the valley of death
i do fear evil i feel alone my heart cold
and out of place
A cry from the saddest, darkest place in the soul. The poetry reads like a beautiful song...
You mentioned God here, which I like so much as this is the time when he bestows His tender grace upon those so lost...
just ask, golden glove boxer years ago,us army veteran ,a contractor is how i make my living,
i am an amateur writer.. been here since june of 2013,couldn`t write then,still can`t.but who cares
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