10/21/12 Dear Blue Eyes

Another Dear Blue Eyes Poem

He has these deadly harmonic blue eyes.

He stared into my eyes, as he shook my hand.

For one minute I believe he cared.

But then I realized my mother was right there.

He doesn't care

He was just being polite

A cute boy

With Ocean Blue Eyes

Why does he matter to me?

I'm over him

I'm over this

I know it's never going to happen

But those Blue Eyes always captured my eye

He sings and dances

He's smart and tough

The opposite of me

But he could be anything indeed.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

One way love is always painful.

[Aly]

Indeed.

[kelvin]

Nice read here to where you into someone thinking hey wouldn't that be something, but finding to know hes only nice for a reason nice description upon the eyes being harmonic to ocean blue. Nice read here as always keep writing fellow writer.

[Aly]

Thank you! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

[kelvin]

You're very welcome

[Carolann Dowsett]

So lovely to have a crush on someone but they don't even care. Love this

[Aly]

That's the story of my life :)
And well probably any other girl's life haha

[Carolann Dowsett]

Well yeah definitely the story of mine too lol

[Levi Levin]

Well written. Simple and descriptive. I had to read it because I get many compliments about my blue eyes.

[Aly]

Lol. Thanks for reviewing.

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome :)

[MOON]

You captured this well, the feeling the ambivalence , the loving.

[Aly]

Thank you

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting piece about infatuation and possibly unrequited love. it is well written and my only suggestion, given that the word eyes appears on multiple occassions is to replace the last one in the line fifth from last with 'heart'. Perhaps use irisis instead of eyes in the first line.

[Aly]

ahh ok. Yes I was very deeply infatuation with him, but thank you for reviewing and reading.

[David the writer]

Nice job. Good flow, conveyed an overall emotion, and made me feel like I was there, shaking his hand too. WHILE you left me one detail, and an action so I could imagine it, but imagine it all how I would like it to be. Good job, again

[Aly]

Thank you so much! Means a lot :)
Thanks to people like you I'm glad I had enough courage to put these on here :) They're not as embrassing anymore.

[David the writer]

I know how that is. I used to *still do sometimes* post a few poems about my gf. Either how much I love her, miss her, or want/need her. Though I prefer to have an image, a symbol really to reflect to the public which is usualy dark like Dracula, but right now I'm in a grey spot, so I decided to go with the italian word for Death. BUT it's hard to get the courage to write it down, but it also takes alot to post it for everyone to see. So I'm glad I could be encouraging. Again, thanks for sharing.

[Aly]

It is scary but thank you and I encourage you to post your writing on here :)
Thanks for reviewing and reading :) Means a lot my friend

[David the writer]

Thank you for the encouragement, but I think I've posted enough...atleast for now. Np, I feel I should review alot more than I do, so it works out great for both of us in the end, doesn't it, my freind?

[Aly]

ah ok. Lol. Yes it does indeed.

[Eryn ♪]

Nice. I love the way you show what's going on behind the man's eyes. The way you keep coming back to them. You worked the repetition well, which in my opinion is hard to do. Good job!

[Aly]

Thank you :)