Little One

I found the first poem i ever wrote about 8 years ago...

 

Little One

 

Cry little one, cry so deep

Drain that painful sap
Let that affliction in
Tears so wrenching will someday cease

 

Cry little one, cry your tears
Face your tribulation
Turn your face towards the golden rays
Glistening on the rivers of disenchantment and deception

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your winning poem. Well done!

[Sasavet]

This is my first contest, and I can't actually figure out how to say who won what because i'm a computer idiot, but i'll just tell you on here. you got fourth!! :O This poem was really interesting and it took a lot of thought, congratulations :D
sorry you don't get your award, but if you know how to pick the winners feel free to message me and i'd be happy to award you :D
Thanks for sharing and congratulations !!

[Sasavet]

I REALLY love this one. It doesn't focus on one memory in particular, just a feeling you felt as a child. I love this, really really good job. Thanks for entering.

[angelina neves]

Very sad and very beautifully done.
And to think that chidhood should be just rainbows of laughs and plays...

[THE BLACK SEAL]

beautiful. i am adding this to my library

[Gin Tsubasa]

Wow. Isn't it funny when you go back and reread those little journals from, say, a million years ago? Last time I did that, I was pretty.. shocked. Hahaha.
But it's good, I'm sure you know that. :) It's cute in it's... own way. If sad poetry can be cute.

[Mary Balfanz]

This seems so sad to me.

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Ahh. Cute if you ask me. I totally see a little child crying thier eyes out. But I also see it as like God looking down at someone and understanding thier greif and telling them to let it out and that it is okay to cry.
This world brings many trials and there is nothing that compares to a good old fashioned deep down soul cleansing cry.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

[An owl on the moon]

Your first poem? Well done! This is incredibly deep, balancing tenderness and pain. So much can be visualized in these simple eight lines!