When Humanity met Humility

When Humanity Met Humility

 

A smear of crimson
A splash of disaster
Makes the human laugh much louder
 

A swish of the blade
A scratch on the skin
Makes the human clap much faster
 

A stretch of reality 
A stench of blood
Makes the human grin so much wider
 

A strip of humanity
A slip of humility
Makes the human bleed so much colder

Reviews

What a powerful poem. You really have a way with words! I like how you expressed what it is like to be human! Great poem!

[One Last Drop...]

This says the type of thing I've been trying to say for years. It portrays human nature the way I think it is, and it doesn't cover the truth. Some things don't change, but not everything is set in stone. Let's just hope human nature is one of the things that can still be changed. Cruelty and bloodlust are not the best ways to live.

~Ashuri

[THE BLACK SEAL]

interesting subject and impeccable style

[Y.F.]

It's a shame we sometimes lose our own humanity while being.....human.
I got a great flow off this one, and I obviously liked the subject.
It has a lot of raw emotions in it, which is always great.
Keep up the good work!

[John Stussy]

Why do we as a race relish the pain of others, but when it's turned on us we hate it so much we become cold? I don't think anyone knows the answer. Society has a strong blood lust though, and whether we consciously agree with it or not it is animal instinct to enjoy it. The ones that make me sick to my stomach are the people who are consciously like that though.. Good poem.

[DiamondNRough AKA Patty..]

The Reality of Society. Great Piece!

[A.r. Bazian]

short... but well!
no more words needed!
it runs great rhyme!

i like it!

[Scirrocco]

Short and viciously sweet! Can't really pick out a favorite part but the end definitely slams this piece home Steffi. How True!

Loved it!!!!

[Mike L. Smyth]

this one scares me...its as if the destruction of the human race sits right in front of me....and your explanation for it is exactly what i think of this subject.

[Nolene Bedi]

you analyze society well in so few words...good job.