Who am I

Who am I? 

 

( This is much more of a performance based piece that was inspired by a team of artists that came to my school)

 

Who am I?
Who am I standing in the hustle and bustle?
What’s my purpose…what’s my name?

What am I to you?
 

Am I your daughter
Your mother
A guardian
Or a friend?
 

(Other voice)Am I the voice in your head beckoning you home?

What am I to You?
 

Am I your conscience
Your fears
Your emotions
Of the passing years

(Other voice) Am I the warm body pulling you into the comfort of cotton and feathers?

What am I to YOU?

Am I your lover
Your w***e
A prostitute
Or some doll

(Other voice) Am I the horror in your eyes as the black pupil dilates so delicately

I am all these things in one yet not specified to all

( Several Separate Voices- Louder with each verse)
I am your daughter, mother, guardian, your friend
I am your conscience, fears, and emotions
I am your lover, w***e, prostitute, and doll!

Damn it. And damn you. I am Me! Cant you just let that be

My face shows brightly on this solid green earth

I am…
I am strong…

My words go unlisted
Who am I...if not for my words….

 

Author's Note

Reviews are always welcome. This is my first performance based piece...

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

I am a spoken word artist and I can see this piece blowing the roof off a joint. Man this is very impactful. You are inspiring me to stop reviewing and just write. And you said poetry is not your strong suit? These lines are what we call in Detroit Michigan Hello Moments;

( Several Separate Voices- Louder with each verse)
I am your daughter, mother, guardian, your friend
I am your conscience, fears, and emotions
I am your lover, w***e, prostitute, and doll!

My only suggestion would be to add another stanza. After reading your material so far I feel that with another stanza added in the begining that it will be just as powerful as the rest of the poem. Maybe I just wanted more. Your writing is strong.

[*SacredWriter*]

Very powerful and inspiring. The conflict of two people inhabiting one. Its very good and well written
I truly enjoyed reading it.

[An owl on the moon]

Strong and powerfully emotive, moving us deeply into the subconscious realms of mind and heart... Beautifully done! I have missed your writing so much!

Craig

[Josh Shepherd]

Two different persons within one. The basic confliction that lies in us, laying there to dry.
It seems angry. Well angry is not the best word. It seems brash. A bit in your face while asking (at points begging you) yo answer a question.

[Captain Spanky]

that is a very interesting poem. I like how you seemend to break up you sub conscience into many different voices.

[Brianna Brie]

Enjoyable read. The complexities of a woman are very well displayed here not to mention the questioning of who are we that we all face from time to time. Wonderful job.

[ElJays Nicholas]

Dare I say, it's sacred! I wonder if you are familiar with any of the texts from the Nag Hammadi Library, because the voice is similar to sn ancient text called Thunder. May I call you Sophia (wisdom) -- if you haven't read this text before, then forget that last line LOL!

This is very good! I like how the question who am I is repeated. This would be a great two person poem to perform. Very good!

[Victor]

I like this one it shows a kind of honor and respect in it. The chants of the other voices in the background give it the deeper meaning. Great write, It's awsome how you got it from a performance!

~Victor