Crimson Mercury

Crimson Mercury, (blood+a type of metal; blood on a knife.)

I have a sick, morbid mind and,
Hormones that are in love with my pain.
What happens when blood mixes with love,
(when blood mixes with metal?)
What happens when heads collide with pillows,
(When tears collide with the floor?)
Oh, what could be the final, fated result?

Life is hurting me so much,
I think I need to try and leave.
I can't bear your touch,
My life is slipping through my hands like a sieve.
(& It's fading so fast..)

So kill me, (I beg you)
So leave me, (It's all I need)
Nothings making sense,
And I want to slip.. Into my dreams.. (Forever)

Life is hurting me so much,
I think I need to try and leave.
I can't bear your touch,
My life is slipping through your hands like a sieve.
(& It's fading so fast..its gone)

Reviews

[Bright Eyes]

I agree with Lunar Pup that the flow is a bit choppy but I like it that way, it seems to have its own beat to it in my mind and it makes sense that way. DON'T CHANGE IT! Cause I like it :) and it's good, I think if you haven't already you should try to put it to music or a beat or something because I think it wants one :)

[Lunar Pup]

The flow of it seems kinda choppy to me but rather then that its a good piece, and I can relate.