Not My Time

 

I am feeling different

Not of the norm

My body is trembling

In the midst of the storm

 

I’ve lost control

My head starts to pound

My body goes limp

I collapse to the ground

 

Thoughts and memories

Flash in front of my eyes

I try to catch them

As my body starts to die

 

Somebody help me

I’m only in my prime

Please….can anyone help

It’s not my time

Reviews

[J.Black]

"Thoughts and memories

Flash in front of my eyes

I try to catch them

As my body starts to die



Somebody help me

I'm only in my prime

Please�.can anyone help

It's not my time"


WOW! This is powerful and full of intense emotion! Very much to the point.

[just is]

AWESOME!!! Write, short and well said and it flows down the page, well written.

[[untitled]]

Your stanzas are short, sweet and to the point. Very good rhyme and flow. For a newbie you're pretty darn good! Keep writing, never give it up. I like this.

[Bluet_Belle]

This sounds like an overdose.

Sad and realistic and all too common...

I give you an A(it'd be an A+ but i am just a bit stingy with my +es:P)

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

wow, intense, like this one the most, ---mishel

[Sarah]

Great job! This flowed very nicely & used some intense language, particularly in the first stanza - I loved the word "storm" to reflect the chaos that you're feeling as you die, particularly when you know that you're not supposed to. Scary. Great read! :)

[Pinky]

Awesome form and flow~ ths is a deep thoughtful poem... Great write!

[Wildfleour]

This was a very sad read for me. I have lost several students in the past few years and each loss feels this way - before its time.

I also think, however, on the fact that most of us will never really be ready to go.