Dream Theater "New Heights"

I'd like to welcome you back

Another journey inside your mind

I'll be your host this evening

Which adventure will we find

 

Journey through the skies

Night has taken over near and far

Cool air tangling your hair in waves

Only light coming from the stars

Surreal feeling I can't explain

One I've certainly felt before

The memory now betrays me

As I float through the dream's core

 

A storm begins to build

Clouds start to crowd the sky

In all this excitement

Still can't believe we can fly

 

Clouds start to burst

Lightning strikes down below

The worry is starting to build

The fear begins to grow

 

Caught in the thrill

Despite my growing fright

My memory floods back

I'm deathly afraid of heights

 

Author's Note

I did a full re-write on this one as I wasn't happy with it.

Reviews

[Seriana]

Ok, I'm gonna be honest, this one was a bit more of a struggle to get through for me. Almost seemed a bit forced? That said, I think you could present the theme a bit better. One other thing, I think these pieces would flow better if you added some punctuation. Sometimes I get stuck where to pause.
But, other than that, I love this idea of your Dream Theater. Keep it up Brandon, you may end up with a nice little series here!

[Bethany Woody]

Our subconscious is almost always fearless. We do things in dreams we would never do in real life. They are a way for us to act out our violent tendencies without reprocusions, our fantasies without quilts. I think that is basically all this is. Just your subconscious living a life with no fear. It seems a bit short, like there could have perhaps been more detail of the sights you are seeing from a birds eye view. Or maybe a bit of detail why you are afraid of heights, is there an honest reason or is it what they call an irrational fear? This on while good, is not as good as the others in the series. I'd work with it a bit and see what you come up with. I do like the dream itsself.