Me.

On revenge

-You never really cared about me,
-You never saw what became of me,
-You didn't love anything about me,
-You forgot all about me,
-You shooed the person inside me,
-You discovered a way to torture me,
-You laughed at what became of me,
-And now I'm failing because of me,
-I should have listened to the inner me,
-I should have never lost me,
-I should have held onto me,
-And now you have destroyed me,
-So now I'm sueing what you did to me,
-In hopes you will rot because of me,
-And it seems the blame should be put on me,
-And I'm so selfish to be thinking of me,
-But seriously it's really all about you and me,
-And because I'm tired of thinking what's wrong with me,
-When there's something entirely wrong with you.

Author's Note

idk...

Reviews

[shadadakiya]

well never let any one bring you down with them or they will,and never love somone more than you do yourself.good write ,hugs.

[Nikki]

hey hun,

wow you commented on so many of my poems i think it is time i returned the favore! lol

"You didn't love anything about me,
-You forgot all about me,"

this part of your poem clashes a bit, you have about side by side of each other. you may want to use a different word here so these two lines dont clash to much.

You never saw what became of me"
You laughed at what became of me,"

you have two contraditions in this part.


and the last thing i see on this that you might want to fix up is everythine ends with mememeeemememememmememeeme that is a bit repetative so you might also want to clear that up. other than that this is a good poem , it may not be your best but certainly not ur worst


all the love
Nikki