Lonely

The greatest lie is love, 

because I bleed for it so desperately.

Surrounded by people I am alone,

I have always wanted only one.

I give love freely, expectantly,

I am loved and lovable.

My isolation is my own,

unshared with all my many friends,

unknown to all my loved ones

I do not want it, I hate it.

But it lives inside me,

and when it is threatened rears its head.

I am impatient to be cured, release me.

Save me.

Take the time to understand me 

when I cannot understand myself.

Hold me, always.

Be near me and a part of me.

All I ask is all you have,

but I will make a fair return.

Reviews

[cloud]

I wrote something with a similar theme on another account but I won't tell you what it is. :) Being lonely is no fun, especially when everywhere you go you see happy couples walking hand in hand and wonder if you'll ever get to that place.

For some though, it's a matter that goes beyond a significant other. There's a darkness that doesn't go away even with friends or family. I've felt this many times and I don't like it. Your emotional plea is not lost on me. We each have a journey to go through in life. Sometimes its a lonely one. I wish you luck and wellness.

[Alias]

Thank-you, I appreciate the review and the words of comfort :) x

[cloud]

You're welcome. :-) x

[Riddhi]

I liked this poem...I can really understand it...You have narrated emotions in a very beautiful way..Keep it up.....

[JaneFoxscale]

Oh I love it. So understandable for me.

[Chase]

I have a few suggestions. You use a lot of punctuation, and thats great, but try and use a wider variety of it. There are too many commas here. They aren't needed at the end of nearly every line. Most people will briefly pause at the end of a line instinctively, so if the pause you are looking for is greater than that cursory pause, THEN add one. Filter them with other punctuation as well, such as colon's, semi-colon's, double hyphen's and hyphen's. The aesthetic appeal will double and the piece will flow more freely.

I look forward to more.

[Alias]

good advice, thank-you! I will revise it and let you know so you can see the new draft :)

[Chase]

Sounds goooooood:)

[Nani Mino]

our hearts need love of others .love is the necessary food for our souls

[armin]

you put your emotions in this piece really well.
I liked it.

armin. ...

[Alias]

thanks so much, this is one of my first poems :) I'd love if you took a look at some others, and I'll gladly look at some of your writing

[armin]

why not. ......

[Mara]

beautiful sad poem, i really like it

'Take the time to understand me
when I cannot understand myself.'

[Inject Positivity]

The truth of lonely life and the deep longing for love is reflecting here....I can relate to the feelings of this poem....Just beautiful and very well thought out poetry....Thumbs up!!!!!

[JMaster1]

I love how you touched with your words in such a gentle way

[Ji Sung Moon]

we really need more female readers... so many dude's perspective. lol

[Alias]

isn't loneliness genderless?

[Ji Sung Moon]

you are right, nice writing but I was referring to the readers who reviewed the writing. Sorry, off topic. lol

[Alias]

i get you, fair point