Bruises

Purple blossoms flower on my skin.

One by one they die and wither,

Ugly yellow tinged with green,

And settle, unbroken white,

As if they had never been.

 

Before the clotted blooms die out

They are happy reminders,

Of drunken tumbles,

Passionate fumbles,

And clumsy accidents we laughed about.

Reviews

[Relic]

Are you sure you're jut starting out in poetry? My guess is you did some writing long before you joined this site? I like all of this, especially tumbles and fumbles and accidents we laughed about. There's a rhythm to that line that dances along nicely. Excellent writing.

[Chris]

A different edge to a multi-bladed knife... but pain still HURTS - intent, accident, or neither.

[Alias]

I disagree, these are happy hurts, the pain is worth the memories, a bruise is just a prolonged sensation, and when the impact was happy it is the happiness that lasts.

[Chris]

true for the lucky few...but for some the injury can keep them from trying the act again - not everyone has the lioness heart and getting can make many minds more fragile still.

[Alias]

Do you remember the days that passed without injury? Do you tell stories about the days that you felt safe? Or are the pain and scars and healing worth it in the end, because you learned something and gained a tale to tell.

[Chris]

a true and yet hard question - life experience for some of us is sooooooo varied and we're "marked" in ways and patterns that flavor our perceptions endlessly. And it isn't that we don't DO what we did - it's that we feel differently each time based on a now that has changed. I probably didn't say it all that well but I didn't mean it as a dig on your experience - just a perception shaped by my own.

[Alias]

I agree with you, this poem might be a happy one, but not all my bruises are and I'm always aware of the scars I bear, even when I wear them proudly. Well said.

[Chris]

I still swim better than a rock and was certified drown-proofed a while back... just sayin.

[Robert Parlange]

I like how you set this one up. It could have gone to a very dark place, but you used it to bring about happy memories.

Very good.

[Skylah Ginette]

This one is beautifully constructed, I love how it flows and it made me smile at the end :)