Trembling Minds

Everything comes racing back,

running at me,

one at a time,

fast pacing attack

Trying to catch your breath,

but nearly aware,

dreams and the darkness among the air

Can I run? Can I hide?
In these dreams it won't define

Shaking with shivers from the roaring cold,
be scared is something I rather be outspokenly told

When the truth is hidden for sometime,

you sit and always wonder why?
Why, are people so inhumanly blind?

In the midst of staying astray,
I never wandered far,

they knew I'd stay

By the time I said my piece,
I didn't stay for they're release

I booked a flight and left on my own,
back to the place that was literally my home

After regaining myself again,

I allowed myself to feel the ken,

I felt the width to see the end
so the trend could never begin

Author's Note

This is a quick piece I had written late. It's about a time when I was 15 and went through a decently rough time.

Reviews

[idiotproof--1]

This is a really good poem I enjoyed reading it. at one point you say "something I rather be" I think you mean "something I would rather be" or "something I'd rather be" other than this it was a very good poem.

[sonnie ibadah]

i think this is my favorite, beautifully written ;)

[Aru Bansal]

Amazing. I really loved the way you wrote that. Keep it up. Thank you for sharing such a good poem. Love. ~Aru.

[Demii]

Thank's a lot for your feedback, and nice comment. :)

[Rahul]

Very creative poetry you "had" written when you were way younger than already "young-er" you are. It's very heartfelt to read when the words seem to be belonged to some emotional heartaches-states brought by loves' to lives. Sometimes, it's hard to bear though it's true, everything's meant to be taught so is heart. Nice imagery!

[Demii]

Thanks for your awesome feedback.
I like your perspective :)

[JC]

I like the rapid flow of words and emotions, real and raw.

[Demii]

Thank you!!

[~]

Demii, I do not know exactly what you had to go through, but your heart bleeds on paper. You mentioned it was earlier in your life, and I am hoping that all is well with you now. Hugs!!!

[Demii]

Awe wow, thanks a lot. I tried to portray it differently in sense, it was also 3 in the morning hah, all is well now yes. It was a horrible time, I'm glad its over! Thanks a lot ! :)

[Chris]

catching a breath seldom comes easy back then... we FEEL with caps and know we are invulnerable til the time we weren't.

[Demii]

Exactly, thanks a bunch !

[Saravanan Evu]

Nice! Rhyming was too good. keep writing Demii ...

[Demii]

Thanks a bunch :)!same to you!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

"When the truth is hidden for sometime,

you sit and always wonder why?
Why, are people so inhumanly blind?"

bravo!!!!
beautifully written....
amazing poetry.....
i loved it......!!!
:)

[Demii]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the review and such kind words :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome!!!!! :) :)

[peacewillconquer]

You just wrote beautifully where I am at in my life right now, dreams and darkness among the air

[Demii]

Thanks so much for the lovely review! & yep sometimes things can be hard!