Death of You

I'm not too sure what this one means to me, but I'm still sorting through it. Hope you like it!

I say I won’t, but I know I’ll choke.
Too hard to control sometimes
The pleasures that she evokes –
Take out the sin inside of me.

Too damned to leave.
But it’s obvious; no fire in your eyes.
You and me, we weep.
I’m running in place.

I don’t want to hurt you
But I’m tearing you asunder.
I don’t know what to do
But let’s just stay together.

I’ll make a deal with the devil;
I promise to save you.
But for now I’m going to revel
In this, this kiss.

No, our palace isn’t cracked.
I’m fixing your pieces.
And what in passion we lack
We make up for in mistakes.

Author's Note

What does the poem mean for you?

Reviews

[17thWhitePrince]

I think the poem is about this guy that justs wants to be with this certain girl and yet it is obvious that she has no feelings for him at this time ... he doesn't want to lose her ... yet he also feels like everything and anything he does seems to be pushing her farther and farther away ... and he says he'll do anything for her ... to get her back ... and he says that he is gonna try to mend the past errors and mistakes ... he's gonna try to pick up the pieces ... and yet he feels that whatever happens ... even if there seems to be no passion, there will afcourse be mistakes :)

VERY NICELY WRITTEN :) I LIKED IT ALOT !!!

[THE LOST ROSE]

It means that you are trying to become one person. You don't want the darker side of your personality. The darker side is sometime the most entertaining side but also the most damaging side as well. You are struggling either trying to get rid of or finding a balance. And if you believe all that I just wrote i got some property to sell you. I am just kidding the poem is fantastic. I did mean what I just said. I love thought provoking pieces and this is the defintion of one. Excellent write, I look forward to reading more tomorrow. Thanks for reviewing my poem earlier today. C-ya in a few hours.

[Walkingblind]

For me it's talking about a relationship that is struggling to be whole
they know that though they make mistakes and go through times
of heartache, confusion, and depression the end goal is better than their pain.
And I think that the girl is having a hard time with the concept due to her past.
Or it could go a whole other way!! I don't know! this is just one way of
like three I saw it going. I liked it, greatly done it made me think. I hope
you find out what it means to you so you can tell me!