Longing To

Longing To

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

I'm screaming my heart out

Yet you can't see

 

The pain that you left

Lives deep inside me

 

I drown all my sorrows

Inside a bottle

 

Don't care what life

Brings me tomorrow

 

If life's a sweet melody

Mine has gone bitter

 

I'm longing to see you

Attend to your Ritter

 

At night I search for you

With my shining armor

 

Enchanted I'll wait

Defending your honor

 

In part I'm tormented

By the pain I inflict

 

My futures demented

And hard to predict

 

The spell has been cast

Which only you are to break

 

My love's everlasting

For no one can take!

 

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

A love gone bad is a painful malady but you expressed it well. Good read. T

[Tessa Anne]

In part I'm tormented
By the pain I inflict
My future's demented
And hard to predict

That line makes the whole poem seem like your saying, i love you, but i'm frikkkin crazy. lol you're REEEALY good. i love your poetry. I Want you to do one for me, consider this a request. Write one about YOUR FAVORITE POET. ANY person in the world that you can look at, and read their poetry and say, wow, they reallly inspire me.

[Crystal]

Love and heartbreak always make great poems to write. Great write.

[Fran Marie]

An Excellent write so very well penned~Fran Marie

[Yvonne Heidt]

This is an excellent poem and I loved it.

"In part I'm tormented
By the pain I inflict
My future's demented
And hard to predict..."

This is my favorite part. Thank you for leaving the definition btw. I appreciate that!

[Robert Luna]

Feeling the hurt flow from your words like water from a stream. Your words seep sadness and a seeking for understand from yourself and the place that you now find yourself to be. You describe a fairy tale like story but there can be no happy ending because it is reality.


Well Done!!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Great flow... heartbreaking as it is the words are so eloquently put together... so nicely done!!

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

this is great work... thanks for sharing

[James Mayfield]

A wonderful expression of a man's pain and enduring love. Well done.

[Tempest]

A beautiful and soulful expression of one of the many byproducts of love. I love that you wrote this as a couplet and the interlacing of a medieval feel with wording. This poem also has a lyrical quality - I could see/ almost hear it being sung. very nice.