Leaving Neverland

Leaving Neverland

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

The children flew out the window

Never to be seen

To a world full of adventures

And Wendy became their Queen

 

She told them marvelous stories

Told them fairytales

Spoke of Cinderella

Spoke of witches and spells

 

They soon forgot their parents

In this wondrous land

They care only for their leader

Better known as Peter Pan

 

A brave soul who knew no fear

A child without a past

Living where dreams are made of

A placed called Neverland

 

Fighting thief and pirates

Flying from cloud to cloud

With his fairy guardian

Tinkerbell by his side

 

Soon the adventure was over

The children had to go to home

Leaving Neverland was painful

Yet all kids turn into adults

 

Except One!!!

 

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

My favorite childrens' story! I think I have all the Peter Pan movies and books! I enjoyed this poem. Some suggestion:

Fighting thief and pirates

"fighting theives and pirates"

TinkleBell by his side

"TinkerBell"... sorry, I chuckled at this. :)

The children had to go to home

"The children had to go home"

Loved it! Thanks for sharing!

[desertraven]

nice change! Good job!
Sandra♥

[BrightEyes]

I like this! and I like the "except one" at the end...which one could take to mean the speaker or Peter Pan himself...so true...we all become adults....but we all still have that inner child...we just have to let them out to play sometimes.

laura

[Esprit]

I personally liked how it didn't rhyme, it flowed just as well without it. Its a good poem to go with the story... another good job! :)

[Tessa Anne]

awe! it was so cute. it didnt rhyme, but it had a flow! i loved it. you were definatly right.

[Abluetopazdragon]

I Like this one. It makes me want to go grab the kids and watch peter pan all over again, thank you for this upbeat poem I really enjoyed it.

[Haden]

This was a lot of fun, an interesting choice of topic. Makes me wonder why you wanted to write a piece on Peter Pan. Not a bad thing, i'm just wondering if it was on tv or something today to get you to write this. my only suggestion would be to put the three syllables (somehow) in front of, "Tinkerbell" (i.e. "a lass called TINKERBELL" or something like that) Fluid piece and a great escape into neverland. Thanks for sharing.

[['tatiz speis]]

Haha! I loved it. You definitely caught the synopsis of the whole story in a rhyme, which is really hard for me to do sice I think all my rhyming sucks, i.e why I hardly rhyme!

[Ashes]

This is a very nice break from your normal stuff (not that your normal is bad of course) and it doesn't even seem like you stopped your normal thought, which can be very hard when transitioning from one style to another. The flow and imagery are also very beautiful and takes the reading on such a joyful little journey.

[James Mayfield]

Definitely a more upbeat piece than your usual fare. I think you managed the transition well enough. Nice work.

[Ladysue]

This was fun to read. It flowed well and made me smile which I needed today. It is different, but I liked it. It was fanciful and Neverland sounds good to me. lol Nice write!!