Lonely

The dull ache begins in her chest

And travels down to her toes,

She curls up until she's compressed,

Then the tears come and they flow

 

Her pain comes from being lonely,

The ones she love are far away,

The place she is at is not homely

And she fears what happens if she must stay

 

Then a light appears before her

And reminds her hope is real,

She remembers love that was before a blur

And recalls that time can heal

 

She slowly gets up off the floor

With a renewed sense of light,

Life will not tear her down like before,

Now she won't give up without a fight

Reviews

[Neon]

I loved your IInd stanza and the last stanza. I can feel the pain, the hurt of love right into the bottom of heart.. the pain in chest .. that pours the drops of tears right in/onto the face. I liked the theme, it's a very emotional poem that's about a breaking heart... A heartfelt poem. Nice work, Nat.

[kate0814]

You are so amazing, never stop doing what you love! You have such a knack in connecting with passion and putting it in a form that we all can see!

[Natalia]

Thank you so much for reading and your kind words!

[MoriartyMesa]

What can i say that more learned men could have said already. I liked this, but there was something to be held back, am I wrong, or was there more you wanted to convey?

[Natalia]

Maybe a little... You made me think really hard about your comment... I think maybe I could have conveyed the loneliness more

[Antoñyo]

Bravo! Love this, and especially the end message; never give up!

Thanks for the share.

[Sami Khalil]

A very good poem...Thank you for sharing...:)