More to Life

I love travel the way some girls love boys.  

While they plan their future weddings and talk about babies, 

I'm dreaming about different places I want to go and the food I'll get to eat.  

They cry when their dream guy turns out to be a fantasy, 

I cry when I see how my young age and responsibilities keep me trapped in this place.  

Me and these girls, we are tied together: by society, by youth, by sisterhood, by a desire to be more than what we are told we are, 

But I refuse to be one of them.  

I won't resign my existence to the only life I've ever known.

  

I will dream big and never give up, 

Because there is more to life than just these four walls.

Reviews

[Ally Monique]

I can relate to this so much! I've been stuck in a small town ever since I was born, and I cant wait to get out of here! I feel like I've wasted my youth walled into this place, and I can't wait until I go off to college and finally get to start experiencing things :)
I love the comparison you made^^ I've never thought of that before, and it fits perfectly
Wonderful read, thanks for sharing :)

[Natalia]

I know exactly how you feel. Thanks so much for reading!

[Lyn Anderson]

Your style is straight forward and honest, and the poem is neatly structured.

[Natalia]

thank you!

[wordman]

and I`m sure somehow you will figure out how to get there
wonderful write

[Natalia]

Thanks for saying so :) And thanks for reading!

[Brook]

I can relate to this massively.
The love for travel is something, not everyone is blessed with. Being trapped in one place for a long while until you're old enough, and have enough money to escape is the worst.

Brilliant write!

[Natalia]

Yes, it's a feeling I know well :) Thanks so much for reading!

[Brook]

You're very welcome!

[Poet]

Your aspirations reveal you're a free spirit that needs to roam and explore. The trivial and suffocating ways of life often put us in cages we cannot escape however and that sucks. Your friends seem stifled and near-sighted compared to you but with time I'm sure you'll spread your wings in time and take off. Despite some grammatical issues you penned your feelings well allowing your thoughts to escape. That's what writing is for.

[Natalia]

Thanks so much for reading :) could you elaborate on the grammer issues so I know better next time? Thanks!

[Poet]

While they plan their future weddings and talk about babies,
I'm dreaming about different places I want to go and the food I'll get to eat(.)

(They cry when their dream guy turns out to be a fantasy.)
I cry when I see how my young age and responsibilities (keeping) me trapped in this place(.)

Me and these girls, we are tied together: by society, by youth, by sisterhood, (by a desire to be more than what we are told we are.)
But I refuse to be one of them(.)

I won't resign my existence to the only life I've ever (known.)

(I will dream big and never give up because there is more to life than just these four walls.)

Hope that helps some.

[Natalia]

Yes it does! Thanks so much!

[Poet]

I'm glad I could help.

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Wow. This was amazing. I, personally, want to travel so badly too someday. Pretty much my bucket list is made up of places that I want to go. I think you did an awesome job with this and I hope you get to go see the world someday :)

[Natalia]

Thanks so much! I agree! My bucket list is all different places haha. I really hope you get a chance to visit them too :)

[❤ Maggie ❤]

Anytime! :) and definitely :)

[Laura Harrison]

This is such an inspiring poem. I hope that I will someday gain the courage to go out and explore the world

[Natalia]

Thank you :)

[Neon]

I will dream big and never give up,
Because there is more to life than just these four walls ...these lines're touching me!

Well ..am glad you're stilll writing and after a long time I read your stuffs... that's pretty impressive and hey, Natty, I must say that "YOUR TOO STILL COOL AS SAME AS BEFORE...am still enjoying your writes and hey, your this write's very creative how you take a new turn to let the feelings go outside about the world, the life that how much you do love into words is much impressive. Your awesome, Natty!

[Natalia]

Thank you :)

[Neon]

My pleasure! :)
So..it means, you love travelling ..am I right??

[Neon]

Opps! May be am wrong! Ha!

[Natalia]

No you're right :)