UNDONE

When the weight of the world is crushing you

The more time

That I spend by myself

Alone and sublime

I need no one  else

Breaking the skin

Cut open for fun

Fraying from within

Becoming undone

Not close to the brink

Already fallen down

Further into abyss I sink

This masked smile , a frown

Anger and animosity

Rage, vengeance, and hate

A never ending atrocity

Does self loathing create

Whatever does not kill me

Does nothing but leave an itch

Supposedly stronger, I should be

But left a bitter son of a b***h

All  of the stars have  aligned

The transformation has begun

A perfect monster by design

For I have become UNDONE...

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Not too shabby. Flows logically into a well set up ending.

Very bitter, but, bitter writing cab be the best writing sometimes.

[justjenn_2u]

I know this feeling well. This could be a heavy metal ballad with music. You write amazing lines.

[timthy]

thank u sis!