Taken

Taken,

By the hate that simmers,

Just under the surface

Taken,

By sweet revenge,

That I could never give

Taken,

By the thoughts,

Of everything in the universe

Taken,

By the secrets I hold,

Of my past,present,and future

I have been taken.......

Reviews

[Shapirta]

wow. very powerful. short, yet powerful. and good!

[Sindu]

Small yet powerful.. To the point. It's beautiful

[potato]

Thank you very much

[Chuba kichu]

Nice writting. I really like short poems. Just Like the one im reading now.:-)

[potato]

Thank you! :D

[Ritesh]

u say a lot through hidden words, cheers!

[potato]

Oh,why thank you.

[AprilRN1210]

well written, your use of repetition here really helps reinforce your ideas... simple yet powerful.. construction and flow are very nice as well.. good job...

there is hidden truth behind each stanza that reaches out and grabs the reader.... those secrets do take a piece of your soul...

[potato]

Why,thank you. I like to write poems with repetition.

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome :)