Mighty Ship

What made you so mighty?

Mighty ship
Iron, Gold, and Silver
One of the best
Floating on
Rivers

Praised with poise
Solely it rides
On the deep waves
Made by the noise
And the light
Carried with the
Sight of success.

Holt and stop,
It started to drop
An anchor to
Keep the mighty ship
Up shop

It hit the icy ground
Iron, Gold, and Silver
Clank against the wooden
Sea floor

Breaking a leg
Breaking its fury
Breaking its durability
Making it silly.

Mighty ship
Half underwater
Not yet sinking,
Barely floating,
What have you
Become?

O’Mighty ship,
May I ask,
What kept you so mighty?
Was it what made you
Or was it the sound of success?

Reviews

[fireblossom]

O'Mighty ship...

I chuckled at that line. That line splashed a majestic color onto the canvas. I like the way your brain works. You may suffer some for that way of seeing and being but don't worry. You are an artist and we are not standing with the crowd. We are the ones standing away describing the crowd. Keep up the good work Lola.

[Lola]

Thank you so much.
This poem is very dear to me as I described a very close friend that is slowly fading away in my life, as she was once so strong and mighty, and now her image is turning vague.
In these lines:

O’Mighty ship,
May I ask,
What kept you so mighty?
Was it what made you
Or was it the sound of success?

The meaning behind this was my confusion and trying to remind her of her mightiness.
As I ask her what kept her mighty, was it the success of our friendship or was it what made her (an old friend of mine who controls her and destroyed her thoughts me)

This poem can be flexible to any situation and mean anything. I just thought you'd like to know my true intentions on it.
You never fail to give me hope, Thank you so much... xo

[fireblossom]

That was generous of you. It really adds to my reading. Wondering where we fit into relationships can be vexing. In the end of course every man and woman stands on their own. Just as a ship mighty or not must face the consequence of being at sea. :-)

Thank you for sharing with me Lola. I'll do the same. If you ever wonder about something in my writing all you need to do is ask. You can ask in the public but if I am scared about revealing something I might chose to respond via private message. Some of my poetry is from places deep inside that I am not sure about myself. :-)

[Eden Reabelle]

Lola, this is gorgeousness. I love the rhythm of the poem. Keep going, you're amazing.