Fame

A Run, On Sentences

I try to keep my hood up when I want to wear a 

hood…ie, 

allen ain't a robot but he rep his set like 

wood…ie,

allen makin pictures makin movies how they 

should be,

better then the rest but i'm not quite where I 

could be,

calling in some friends I don't ask them to 

admire us,

one last time so I can see that sparkle in 

your iris, 

it pulls me in without regret and strikes me like 

a virus,

antidote, I come prepared cause I don't like surprises.

Author's Note

The end of each line/rhyme is the beginning of the next.
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Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

Some kinda explosion is within this piece
Waiting for that spark to spread the flame. Keep writing and welcome to the Cafe.

[youngkingkwan]

You're totally right, this was the beginning, middle or end of something. Thank you for your review. :)

[Bear]

This is very creative and I love the ending beginning idea, I will have to try coming up with something using it, very cool. Standing Ovation! Clap, Clap Clap, Clap.

[youngkingkwan]

Thank you again very much. It is so hard to critique others work. With so many different ideas, methods, meaning, styles... one comma in a different place can change the whole meaning.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

I must say I really like this. It's quite creative and very wordy. But somehow I find it a bit goofy. Which also adds quality to the piece. Great job. Keep up the good work.

[youngkingkwan]

Thanks for the review and your take. I do find it a little goofy myself. The title "Fame" is almost like an inside joke if you interpret from a hollywood stand point. As always thanks for the time.