The River

My beloved river has become a venomous snake!

The river stinks
It's a hell on  the earth
My mood sinks
As I miss its mirth

I can't measure
The extent of pollution
The precious treasure
Has become a delusion

The river is full of venom
It jumps out to bite one and all
There lives danger in each atom
You will be killed soon if you fall

The river is a pool of sin
Effusion of humanity drains into its stream
Signs of death dance and grin
Frustration and fear make me scream

Reviews

[Akleja]

This poem really speaks to me, since I really care about the environment and and how disgusted I am that it's been abused to such an extent... This is really good. It still gives me goosebumps even though I've read through it several times. I like the second part the most since it really makes me emotional...
"I can't measure
The extent of pollution
The precious treasure
Has become a delusion"
You're really good with words and the rhymes are fitted perfectly.

[zainul]

I feel very blessed that you could relate with the piece.
Thank you for stopping by to grace the piece.
I am also grateful for your nice compliments :)

[chuna]

good writing!
it's a great piece...
I love the line...
"the river is full of venom
it jumps out to bite one and all...

[zainul]

Thank you Chuna for the favor.
I feel very inspired by your review.

[chuna]

welcome
C:

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

Oooh, I really like this.

Favorite part:

"I can't measure
The extent of pollution
The precious treasure
Has become a delusion"

Again, your choice of words is magnificent. Good Job! Thanks for sharing!

[zainul]

Thank you Elizabeth for the amazing review.
You have really made my day.
Your generous compliments are blessing for me.
Thanks for stopping by again :)

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-Smith]

Anytime, friend (:

[zainul]

(:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sin is a snaky river that flows within us and can pollute our hearts, minds and souls...

just like your favorite river here has been literally polluted and ruined...

but that is the way of man ...so often we ruin everything that starts out pure.

good write.

[zainul]

Thank you Sir for the thoughtful review.
Your interpretation is very meaningful.
It means a world to me :)