'A Morbid Mind'

....not..quite...right..

This Scorching Sun 

It Burns Me Up 

Fills my Veins with Furry 

A Loaded Gun 

Kills all the Fun 

Making my Skull Gory 

I Hate the Sight 

Yet, Love the Pain 

and Blood is Never Boring 

You Hear the Scream 

Inside a Dream 

A Demented thought that's Buried 

- DD

Reviews

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. death is definitely a delectable thought ... but only on the surface ... wanting it is only proof of a wanting life ... for me ... these words drive home the need for proactive reconstruction of life ... to make it more precious than death ... and i connect with that ... it's time we changed a few things ... brilliantly written ... very stark and powerful ...

[Brianna Brie]

Again superb rhyme and rhythm. Love that last verse. I don't know whether to smile over the cleverness or be scared of the words.

[freaknkamikaze]

I love this!

[lawrence bear]

R.I.P
an excellent piece, love it

[Jujubee_:]]

Wow. I love it. It kinda gives me chills actually! Great write.