Dead to the World

Random...

I can't breath

It's so dark

Where am I?

Where did you go?

I'm all alone.

I feel so cold.

I'm going to puke.

The air is so foul.

It smells of death.

I try not to scream.

I don't like this feeling

The feeling of nothingness.

The feeling of hate.

It all comes from nowere.

Everything is dark.

I think I am dead.

Dead to the world.

 

Author's Note

Ignore spelling

Reviews

[Cole =D]

hey i really like the change in the shading. but there is one thing i'm a little bit unsure about and it's th lin, "i'm going to puke." i understand what ur going for and i like it but i feel like it becomes really unpoetic just for that one line but then goes back to being poetic.

idk that's just my thought =D

[Lexy]

Just one correction for nowere-nowhere.

Anyway, interesting format. Interesting place of words. It's weird, or it was, the "Where did you go? I'm all alone/I'm so cold/I'm going to puke" but I got it. This is interesting and to me it seems like your combining things that don't sound like they make sense but it does!!!

The only line I don't like is "The Feeling of hate." Are you trying to say that you hate that he's (The person) is gone? Because it seems like that line came out of nowhere.