tainted water

Hopeless..

Im drowning. 

I give up as I let the black tainted

Water make its way into my lungs.

They say it hurts to die.

But it doesn't.

The more you give up the faster the

Blinding light takes over.

It's hopeless to help me now.

I never meant to push you to such displays.

I'm not a perfect person.

I close my eye's to see your beautiful face

One more time.

I smile a warm smile as I drown

Into the ugly I used on you.

"I'm.sorry.."

Author's Note

I hurt someone and the guilt is takeing over.
I didnt mean to yell at the wrong person.i hope they
Can forgive me

Reviews

[Alex Boyd]

I like it's very insightful. How you made yourself vulnerable and open not caring I sense that in your writing (lol) though I must ask, Why? I myself is a dark person though I do enjoy the light but why be sorry for your actions??? It is your actions and no one else why must people like us always be sorry??? Why no one ever tells us sorry???

[sheriH 2]

So true . I agree with what u said but at last I said sorry for I felt the guilt and hurt I did not inteed to put on this person .At the moment I believed if anyone coukd have been hurt it was I because in truth maybe I would have been better to cope with it.
-sheri

[Perfect Mistake]

Very tragic and beautiful. Loved it, you pinpointed the feel of sorrow very well in this piece.

[sheriH 2]

Thank you very much, im glad you liked it.
-sheri

[MomzillaNC]

Tragic lines of loss and remorse and of giving up.

NOTES: A few edits/corrections, recommendations…
Hopeless…
[I'm] [drowning].
I give up as I let the black tainted
Water make its way into my lungs.
They say it hurts to die.
But it [doesn't].
The more you give up, the faster
the blinding light takes over.
[It's] hopeless to help me now.
I never [meant] to push you to such displays.
[I'm] not a perfect person.
I close my eyes to see your beautiful face…
[Just] one more time.
I smile a warm smile as I [drown]
Into the ugly I used on you.
"I'm… sorry… "

[sheriH 2]

Thanks for all the corrections I know they're were manny but I was upset and didnt care
I will re edit it and make it more better.thanks
-sheri

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Hope it was helpful. We all get a little lost in the rush of words from our fingertips.