Lucky Am I

How Lucky am I,

A broken being,

To have the priviledge

To miss someone

So complete.

Reviews

[JayG]

Wow, you really are in love with yourself.

[Omikron]

Hey, appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Not sure if it's meant to be snarky, though. Please elaborate :)

/ O

[JayG]

Actually, I owe you an apology. This was meant for someone who often dumps in ten or twenty self-centered short pieces at once. Unfortunately, I clicked on the wrong piece from the main menu of postings. And when I read this, because it's the author addressing someone unknown, relating to events, and the unstated result of them, I replied to you as I would have to that other person.

So...I looked at your work, and can see that you're working hard. But your approach is the one we're taught in school, as they ready us for employment: fact-based and author-centric. So mostly, it's you talking about you, and what matters to you—but for which the reader lacks context.

But, the reader wants to be entertained, by being made to feel and care, not know more about what's bothering the author this day.

In F for Freedom, for example, you took an essay on a childhood experience and chopped it into short lines. But if writing poetry was that simple everyone would be a poet.

My point is that there's a LOT to writing poetry that's not obvious, but is necessary.

So my suggestion is to dig into the skills of the poet's superpower, the ability to induce the emotions you choose into the reader with no more than the words you choose and their placement.

And to that end, two suggestions: Mary Oliver's, A poetry Handbook is a gem, filled with surprises and insight.

https://dokumen.pub/a-poetry-handbook-0156724006.html

And for metrical poetry, I suggest you hop over to Amazon and read the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. The man is brilliant.

And again, sorry. Absolutely, it was snarky, but not meant for you.

[Omikron]

Thanks again for your thoughtful and insightful comment. You've pinpointed the very thing I've struggled with ever since I started writing poetry over 10 years ago. I have no formal education within literature, and since English is my third language, I often struggle to translate my inner vision to a poem. My style of writing on my native language is vastly different, and I show a completely different personality through those poems.

I've been trying to crack the enigma of poetry, as I've always aspired to be a writer, preferably a good one at that. I've always stayed the cliché that I never chose poetry, but it chose me. It's the one stable thing in my life I've continually turned to.

Therefore, I can't tell you how much I appreciate your comment. Not many people take the time to give me proper constructive criticism on my poetry, it has often been an adventure in solitude. It's hard to establish proper development when the only perspective I have on my poetry is my own.

Thanks again. I'll check out the book recommendations!

Sincerely,
O.