Reflective Surface

See the results of its presence.

 REFLECTIVE SURFACE

THE STILLNESS OF THE WIND CAPTIVATES ME WITH THE SILENCE OF HIS PRESENCE.

IT IS A FORCE TO BE RECKONED WITH; AS SHE MOVES SUPERNATURALLY UNTOUCHABLE, YET FELT EVERY PASSING SECOND.

MY SHIVERING SMILE TRUMBLES AT THE GRASP OF HER IMMORTAL ESSENCE; WHEN THEY SAY THE WIND HAS DIED DOWN.

YOU! A RESTLESS RHYTHM INTANGIBLE.

MOVES EVERYWHERE, SHAPING OUR EXISTENCE AND OUR

REALITY WITH UNSEEN HANDS.

YOUR POWER REVEALS ITSELF IN EXISTENCE, NEVER EXPLAINING

BUT ALWAYS FELT, JOURNEYING TO STARBORN DUST.

ENDLESS AND FLUID, OFTEN DEVASTATION DANCES LIKE THE MORNING DEW:  LEAVING YOUR IMPRINT DEEPER THAN FAREWELL.

I AM A TOPAZ, IN VESSEL OF CLAY, 

BREATH YOU IN; FILL MY HEART, FILL MY LUNGS.

WHILE YOU SING TO ME AN ETERNAL SONG.

YOU CARRY ME IN THE CRADLE OF YOUR VORTEX.

WHERE THE WINDS NEVER END.

Author's Note

Come surround us with your unpredictable results.

Reviews

[abbypullanlitandpoetry]

This poem has some really stunning imagery like "shivering smile trembles at the grasp of her immortal essence" and "I am a topaz, in vessel of clay" that capture something mystical about wind and human fragility. The personification of wind as this powerful, supernatural force is compelling and creates a sense of awe throughout the piece.
The main thing to work on is consistency in pronoun usage as the wind shifts between "his," "she," "they," and "you" which can be confusing for readers. Picking one approach and sticking with it would help clarify the relationship you're exploring.
Is there an intent for this to be in all caps? Would this be better in a concrete poetry form? The all caps gives it an almost biblical or proclamatory quality, like shouting into the wind, but it might also work beautifully as concrete poetry. Imagine arranging the lines in spirals or curves to mimic wind patterns. But honestly, there's something powerful about this voice crying out to the elements that really works, and the mystical tone you've created is genuinely moving.