Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[hopelessromantic]

deep

[Dearantlers]

That's beautiful, and a great write! Thanks for the rr~

[joshua deathdealer]

Great write. Honest and well portrayed..xx

[LadyNaida]

Waiting is the kicker. But, when you wait and that special someone comes along and sweeps you off your feet, than the wait is well worth it.

[the in between]

Waiting can get intolerable and feel pointless when times are hard. Loved this poem it's something I can relate to very well. 100/100

[Japanese Cherry]

Nice job!

[Clever Forever]

I love this! It's so sincere, and its very well written. Great job!:)

[Shy Girl]

Each section starts out strong, then fades to simple, like singing out breaths of lyrics in music. It was very captivating. I liked it very much. I agree, you should see if you are able to put notes to each stanza. Very nice on its own as well. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Sincere words, but I would love to hear them in song.
Very promising work. I easily identified with your themes.
The connection with the reader is solid.

[Silent Knight]

is very good.