Square Roots

Imperfect square roots
are the core mindset of the
evangelical.

Reviews

[abbypullanlitandpoetry]

This is a really clever concept - using mathematical terminology to critique religious thinking is unexpected and sharp. The idea that imperfect square roots (irrational, never-ending numbers) represent the evangelical mindset is a brilliant comparison.
The main thing to work on is expansion. Right now it feels more like the seed of a poem than a complete piece. Adding more concrete imagery or examples of what specific aspects you're comparing could help readers follow your mathematical metaphor.
But the core concept here is smart and original - it's exactly the kind of unexpected comparison that makes readers stop and think.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Thanks so much.

[Judy Ponceby]

A very interesting perspective! Food for thought.

[Ed Hart]

i find that when my carrots have square roots they're easier to stack