Valley of Expiation

====Valley of Expiation====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 2014

 

Echoes of a bleeding shower,

Occupy the nothingness;

Water falling through: empty,

Apparition, Me:

Access denied!

 

Faculty of senses, senseless:

What did i witness?

What did i do?

In rush, in fear, in flight;

Perhaps, reason was roadkilled!

 

Rising realisation:

Emanates beams of guilt;

From over: the folds of mistakes.

It’s late, blood floods my,

Valley of expiation.

 

The choice:

Only a canal can drain this.

Hope shines off the metal;

Hope: forgiveness blooms,

Once the atonement resurfaces.

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Reviews

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Deep thought, true senses and marvellous writing.

"Apparition, me: access denied" - Moved with these lines. Aren't being human today is an apparition itself? we have been losing our identity every moment, failing to realize the evil but still thinking that we haven't sinned - "Rising realization: emanates beams of guilt" - indeed so.

Your choice of words is powerful and you have a great potential. Will love to read more from you.

Thank you

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much for this generous review and insightful comments!!! :) :)

[Ayushi Beura]

A deep thought, Mostly I liked the way you have arranged it with those pictures
This poem is a glimpse of what some of your readers will relate with their past memories.
Awesome!brim full of feeling and emotion!
keep writing!
Thanks for sharing

[Ruth]

Undergoing is a word I feel from this...an undergoing of cleansing and the knowledge that to heal or accept we have to let it ebb and flow at times...nice to read you today hon :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Ow! i mean really good one especially the theme and a different writing style . well done! i really appreciate this kind of uncommon works ...

[rashu]

what a amazing peice of work this is ..
you write really well..
really your words mean a lot ..
the picture is also accompanying the writing really well
keep writing
would love to read more of u :)

[Tasfia Islam]

Wow....magical work done....

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a lot................ :) :)

[Fatima]

Love it, you did a great job, i'm excited to read more from you.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

so glad you liked it..........would love to hear more from you...............thank you for appreciating............:) :)

[R Smith]

an exemplary poem Pushkar, brilliant writing :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much sir.........it means a lot!!!! :)

[Linda alexander]

Great and thought provoking writing, the picture is also intrigue, liked it a lot

[Pushkar Prabhat]

so glad you liked this one........thank you so much!!! :) :)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[Confuser]

Wow! The imagery was magnificent - I loved it. Thank you. Quite a writer. Scarey, but then I would be picked back up. Thank you.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind review!!! so very glad that you loved it!!.....:D :)

[Confuser]

You're quite welcome. Really enjoyed it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you again........you are so kind!! :) :)

[Confuser]

Another re-read. You still the wonderful writer; saw more in it this time; a suicide. The metal metaphor, the blood. Thank you.

[swathi]

really well written....loved the "Only a canal can drain this.
Hope shines off the metal".....loved these words just beautiful!!!!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

yup that's your zoner!!! so glad you liked it!! thank you for the review!!!:) :)

[swathi]

hee.....heee

[Pushkar Prabhat]

..............:) :) :)